Looking into the starry sky,
I feel the breeze swim through me,
it swims past and I stand between its strands,
it swims, the breeze,
I stand through its strands and it swims past,
and it cools my body on such a hot humid night.
Such peace I haven't felt in a long long time.
The sand at my feet are warm,
but cool when I dig my toes in.
But at my feet, its warm.
I stood still, and still looking up into the sky,
the sky filled with stars, twinkling stars.
I'll make a wish if I see a shooting star,
shooting stars are so rare, so rare,
it never comes, so rare.
It's only there when you're not watching,
when you blink.
I'll make a wish if I see, if ever.
Such a beautiful night,
too bad it's only a dream.
In class free writing, April 12, 2007.
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8 comments:
I love it... but I hate it because it was only a dream. I should've known, the sky's never that beautiful around here. This poem makes me think about a lot of things. "It's only there when you're not watching,
when you blink." my favourite line
Good Job =)
i realli like this one the dream felt so real...if only it weren't a dream
i really like Dream
the description of your toes in the sand
and the hot humid night
i love it
i love hot humid nights, they're so peaceful and warm. you feel hazy and lazy and just want to dream away...
hope you see a shooting star in real life soon =]
good job~
Great to read your works-in-progress; thanks for posting.
Please bring to class tomorrow (Monday) three copies of the poem(s) you've created for the collaborative poetry project. We'll be working in groups on the next step of the project, so it's important to bring in your original work as a public draft you're ready to share with your groupmates. You'll need copies for everyone in your group.
wow
i really like this poem
whoever you are who wrote this i give you my props!
cant wait to read some of your new stuff!
later yo keep it poppin.
hey, i thought this poem had depth to it u put feeling and passion into it the only thing i think u need to work on is connecting each lil new topic or state of mind together. but all and all i thought it was awsome m im looking so forward to dreaming!!
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